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The following maps illustrate road that leads to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

The following maps illustrate road that leads to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010. Overall, it is clear to see that one of the main changes during the years is Bus station and the second one is Public car park station. Firstly, the Southern Western side of city hospital was waste yard in 2007, and by 2010 new Bus station had been built. The other change is that there was a bus stop in the East of the hospital but it has been removed in 2010. But the yard of the city hospital has not been changed since 2007. Moreover, in 2007 there was one parking station which public and staffs can park but in 2010 it separated into two parts, east part of the hospital was public and the south part of the hospital was staff car parking station in 2010. But during three years the roads has not been changed.
The following maps illustrate road that leads to a city
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hospital
in 2007 and 2010.

Overall
, it is
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clear
to
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see
that one of the main
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changes
during the years is Bus
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station
and the second one is Public car park station.

Firstly
, the Southern Western side of city
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hospital
was waste yard in 2007, and by 2010 new Bus
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station
had
been built
. The other
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change
is that there was a bus
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stop
in the East of the
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hospital
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but
it has
been removed
in 2010.
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But
the yard of the city
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hospital
has not been
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changed
since 2007.

Moreover
, in 2007 there was one parking
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station
which public and staffs can park
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but
in 2010 it separated into two parts, east part of the
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hospital
was public and the south part of the
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hospital
was staff car parking
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station
in 2010.
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But
during three years the roads has not been
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changed
.
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IELTS academic The following maps illustrate road that leads to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

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153 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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