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The following line graph illustrates the quantity of grievance collected by one airline throughout a six months period in 2009 Overall, the number of reports received by the complaints department either in person or by telephone increased from April to june.

The following line graph illustrates the quantity of grievance collected by one airline throughout a six months period in 2009 Overall, the number of reports received by the complaints department either in person or by telephone increased from April to june. RyB5M
The following line graph illustrates the quantity of grievance collected by one airline throughout a six months period in 2009 Overall, the number of reports received by the complaints department either in person or by telephone increased from April to june. Whereas the number of complaints via email continued to decline. from the graph shown, it can be said that there is an increase where each graph has its peak, complaints through in-person media continue to increase with a peak in June of 1800, complaints with telephone media fluctuate with the peak occurring in June with a total of 1600 and complaints via email decreased in 6 months with the highest point in January of 700 from the graph we can also get info on the decline in each method used, in this case, complaints via email continued to decline from January to June with the steepest decline and stagnated in May and June with a total of 400. and complaints by telephone fluctuated with graph that goes up and down with sharp drop of 700 and in-person complaints with a drop of 300 in january
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illustrates the quantity of grievance collected by one airline throughout a six months period in 2009

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department either in person or by telephone increased from April to
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via email continued to decline.

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has its peak,
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through in-person media continue to increase with a peak in
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with telephone media fluctuate with the peak occurring in June with a total of 1600 and
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via email decreased in 6 months with the highest point in
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via email continued to decline from January to June with the steepest decline and stagnated in May and June with a total of 400.
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and
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by telephone fluctuated with
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that goes up and down with sharp drop of 700 and in-person
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with a drop of 300 in
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IELTS academic The following line graph illustrates the quantity of grievance collected by one airline throughout a six months period in 2009 Overall, the number of reports received by the complaints department either in person or by telephone increased from April to june.

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