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the following diagrams show a current map of Peyton park and a plan for proposed changes.

The illustrations below show the current map of Peyton Park and a proposed plan for some changes. Overall, there were numerous changes such as changing the location of the tennis court and picnic area. Moreover, they added some amenities in the park such as play ground and a swimming dock. In the current setting of Peyton Park, the lake is located on the east side. For people who likes to play tennis, the court is currently situated on the west side of the lake. Meanwhile, people who wants to relax and just have a nice picnic, they'll find the area on the north side. In addition, parking is also available on the south part of the park. In the proposed changes of the park, they will add a swimming dock on the lake which is located on the west part of the lake. People can now have a nice and safe swim with the dock. Moreover, tennis court will be moved on the east side of the lake. Also, the picnic area will be situated on the northwest part. Interestingly, a play ground will also be added on the northeast or just beside the picnic area. Meanwhile, parking lot is still located on the south part of the park.
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