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The graphs below illustrate unemployment rate and average earning based to the level of education achieved. Overall, high school graduates has the highest unemployment rate. In contrast, graduate degree has the lowest one. In addition, high school graduates has the lowest average earning while graduate degree has the highest average earning. Unemployment rate differs based on education level. Workers who finished high school has a 5. 5% unemployment rate. Some college degree has a lower unemployment rate with 4. 2%. Meanwhile, the one who has a college degree has a rate of 2. 5%. Evidently, graduate degree has 1. 2% unemployment rate. This shows that employees who has a graduate degree has a better chances to stay permanently in their work. Average weekly earning has also an evident difference. Workers who has a graduate degree is paid more with an average of $1, 500. While college degree is paid $400 less compared to graduate degree. Moreover, workers with some college and and high school diploma are paid $675 and $600, respectively. Therefore, people who finished high school has the lowest weekly earning and highest unemployment rate. In contrast, people who got graduate degree has the highest weekly earning and lowest unemployment rate.
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IELTS academic the following diagrams show a current map of Peyton park and a plan for proposed changes.

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