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The following diagram show the process of bricks production and explain the steps.

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The following diagram show the process of bricks production and explain the steps. We can see that brick is made using only one material, and that the manufacturing process consists of six steps. It requires seven steps until  the last step, delivery. At the first stage in the production of brick clay is dug up from the ground by a digger. Next, this clay is placed onto a metal grid. And then clay is break up into pieces by a metal grid after that, small pieces are reached to the roller. In the next stage clay is mixed with sand and water. And this mixture is changed to brick. Following this brick can then be shaped by mould or using wire cutter. Next, this bricks are heated in a drying oven to produce dry bricks. After drying stage, the bricks through a heating process and then freezing stage. They are heated in a kiln from 200c to 13000c respectively and follow by cooling process and let it keep in cooling chamber about 48 to 72hours. At the fourth stage of this process bricks are packed and finally can be sent to their destination respectively.
The following diagram
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of
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bricks
production and
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We can
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that
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brick
is made
using
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only
one material, and that the manufacturing
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process
consists of six steps. It requires seven steps until
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the last step, delivery.

At the
first
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stage
in the production of
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brick
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clay
is dug
up from the ground by a digger.
Next
, this
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clay
is placed
onto a metal grid. And then
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clay
is break up into pieces by a metal grid after that,
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small
pieces
are reached
to the roller. In the
next
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stage
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clay
is mixed
with sand and water. And this mixture is
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changed
to
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brick
. Following this
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brick
can then
be shaped
by
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mould
or using wire cutter.
Next
,
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this
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bricks
are heated
in a drying oven to produce dry bricks.

After drying
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stage
, the
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bricks
through a heating
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process
and then freezing
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stage
. They
are heated
in a kiln from 200c to 13000c
respectively
and follow by cooling
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process
and
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let
it
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in cooling chamber about 48 to 72hours. At the fourth
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of this
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process
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bricks
are packed
and
finally
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sent
to their destination
respectively
.
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