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City Map Changes from 2007 to 2010

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Seeking from an overall view, it was significant change that the road access to the town hospital had been improved in 2010. This modification involved new bus station, new roundabouts road shape, and new parking facilities. If we see the changes in details, we can know that in 2007 there were three bus stops for both side of Hospital Road. This road was not show in 2010 and instead we see the expansion of a transport station on the west side of main road. The visitor who rides the bus will stop at the station via two new roundabouts. Different from the change of access and bus stops, the main hospital building still looks similar in 2010. The significant improvement was parking area. In 2007, both staff and visitor used the same car park which was located in south of main building. However, by 2010, this original car park had become parking area only for staff. For visitor, there had been new car park located on the east side of main building.
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access to the town hospital had been
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improved
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bus station,
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roundabouts
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shape, and
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parking facilities. If we
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, we can know that in 2007 there were three bus
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stops
for both side of Hospital
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the expansion of a transport station on the west side of
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. The visitor who rides the bus will
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stop
at the station via two
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