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The following diagram derives from a pie chart which illustrates the intake of three types of nutrients in typical meals.

The following diagram derives from a pie chart which illustrates the intake of three types of nutrients in typical meals. mXO3N
The following diagram derives from a pie chart which illustrates the intake of three types of nutrients in typical meals. The general perspective finds that The three types of nutrients include Sodium, Saturated fats and Added sugar. The most consumed nutrient is Sodium followed by added sugar and then saturated fats. The data is taken from the united states of America. Looking at the details, Sodium consumed during the snacks and the breakfast is the same i. e. 14%. Secondly, USA citizens consume a lot of Sodium (43% and 29%) while having dinner and lunch. Another perspective finds that Compared to the Sodium intake while dinner, Saturated fats consumed slightly lesser by 6%. While eating lunch, breakfast and snacks the sodium and saturated fats are consumed between 29% to 14% which is slightly equal. In a like manner to the previous points, People in the USA make a lot of intake of added sugar in the snacks (42%) followed by dinner(23%)and then breakfast(16%) and lunch (19). Dinner contributes to the consumption of added sugar of 23% which is comparatively less than the sodium and saturated fats consumed during dinner. On a final note, The most nutrient consumed by an average USA person is Sodium and saturated fats by eating dinner and the sugar while having a snack.
The following diagram derives from a pie chart which illustrates the intake of three types of
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nutrients
in typical meals.

The general perspective finds that The three types of
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nutrients
include Sodium,
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Saturated
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fats
and
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Added
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sugar
.
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The
most
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consumed
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nutrient
is Sodium followed by
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added
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sugar
and then
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saturated
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fats
.
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The
data
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united states of America
.

Looking at the
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details
, Sodium
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consumed
during the
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snacks
and the breakfast is the same
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i. e.
14%.
Secondly
, USA citizens consume
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a lot of
Sodium (43% and 29%) while having
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dinner
and lunch. Another perspective finds that Compared to the Sodium intake while
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dinner
,
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Saturated
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fats
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consumed
slightly
lesser by 6%. While eating lunch, breakfast and
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snacks
the sodium and
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saturated
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fats
are
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consumed
between 29% to 14% which is
slightly
equal.

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In a like manner
to the previous points,
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People
in the USA
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a lot of
intake of
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added
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sugar
in the
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snacks
(42%) followed by dinner(23%)and then breakfast(16%) and lunch (19).
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Dinner
contributes to the consumption of
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added
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sugar
of 23% which is
comparatively
less than the sodium and
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saturated
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fats
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consumed
during dinner.

On a final note, The most
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nutrient
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consumed
by an average USA person is Sodium and
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saturated
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fats
by eating
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dinner
and the
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sugar
while having a
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snack
.
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IELTS academic The following diagram derives from a pie chart which illustrates the intake of three types of nutrients in typical meals.

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