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The table gives information about age, income and poverty population in 3 states in USA in 2000

The table gives information about age, income and poverty population in 3 states in USA in 2000 30QW5

The given table demonstrates the figures of human databases such as age, income and poverty population in divergent states in the USA in 2000. Overall, there was an increase in the figure of the 60s age group in all three states while there is a gradual decline in the number of children, average individuals income and poverty population. The percentage of 60s-year-old people started at 13% in California, after which it experienced a progressive fall to 8% in Utah. The most significant change was seen in Florida, the pace at which rose dramatically and reached a peak at 23%. However, the proportion of children under 18 made a noticeable jump from only 17% in California to 28% in Utah before falling significantly to 16% in Florida. 23. 000 US dollars were paid per person in California, with subsequent fluctuation and final growth from 17000 in Utah to 22000 dollars in Florida. Meanwhile, the percentage of the poverty population in Florida was nowhere near as much as that in California, at 12% as opposed to 16% respectively

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 table demonstrates the figures of human databases such as age, income and poverty population in divergent states in the USA in 2000.

Overall
, there was an increase in the figure of the 60s age group in all three states while there is a gradual decline in the number of children, average individuals income and poverty population.

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 in Florida, the pace at which rose dramatically
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23. 000 US dollars were paid
 per person in California, with subsequent fluctuation and final growth from 17000 in Utah to 22000 dollars in Florida. Meanwhile, the percentage of the poverty population in Florida was nowhere near as much as that in California, at 12% as opposed to 16% respectively

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