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The following diagram derives from a bar chart which illustrates the country’s earnings from the export sector by the year 2015-2016.

The following diagram derives from a bar chart which illustrates the country’s earnings from the export sector by the year 2015-2016. NwGLy

The following diagram derives from a bar chart which illustrates the country’s earnings from the export sector by the year 2015-2016. The general perspective finds that petroleum products have earned a huge amount of money in the period of 2015-2016. While Textile exports showed a decline in the exports. Meanwhile, agricultural products have shown consolidation in the same range for 2 years. Looking at the details, Petroleum products sold during the year 2015-2016 were worth 60$ Billion with a 3% growth. Next, The engineered goods surged by 8. 5% which is triple the percentage of petroleum growth. On the other hand, Gems and jewellery plunged by 5. 18% worth $30 billion by 2016. Besides that, Agriculture products showed a slight positive change by 0. 81% in the year 2016. While for textiles the earning increased by more than 15. 24% in 2016 which is five times greater than the percentage of the petroleum sector. The textiles sector earned $25 billion in 2015 and $31 billion in the next year 2016. In conclusion, we can see that the country has overall succeeded in the year 2016 by approximately 22%. Even though Gems and jewel showed a decline but the country managed to gain about 22%.

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Petroleum
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Besides
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showed
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While
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 the country managed to gain about 22%. 