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The following diagram derives from a bar chart which illustrates the country’s earnings from the export sector by the year 2015-2016.

The following diagram derives from a bar chart which illustrates the country’s earnings from the export sector by the year 2015-2016. NwGLy
The following diagram derives from a bar chart which illustrates the country’s earnings from the export sector by the year 2015-2016. The general perspective finds that petroleum products have earned a huge amount of money in the period of 2015-2016. While Textile exports showed a decline in the exports. Meanwhile, agricultural products have shown consolidation in the same range for 2 years. Looking at the details, Petroleum products sold during the year 2015-2016 were worth 60$ Billion with a 3% growth. Next, The engineered goods surged by 8. 5% which is triple the percentage of petroleum growth. On the other hand, Gems and jewellery plunged by 5. 18% worth $30 billion by 2016. Besides that, Agriculture products showed a slight positive change by 0. 81% in the year 2016. While for textiles the earning increased by more than 15. 24% in 2016 which is five times greater than the percentage of the petroleum sector. The textiles sector earned $25 billion in 2015 and $31 billion in the next year 2016. In conclusion, we can see that the country has overall succeeded in the year 2016 by approximately 22%. Even though Gems and jewel showed a decline but the country managed to gain about 22%.
The following diagram derives from a bar chart which illustrates the country’s earnings from the export sector by the
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2015-2016.

The general perspective finds that
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petroleum
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products
have earned a huge amount of money in the period of 2015-2016.
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Textile exports
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showed
a decline in the exports. Meanwhile, agricultural
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products
have shown consolidation in the same range for 2 years.

Looking at the
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details
,
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Petroleum
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products
sold during the
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year
2015-2016 were worth
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60$
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Billion
with a 3% growth.
Next
, The engineered
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goods
surged by 8. 5% which is triple the percentage of
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petroleum
growth.
On the other hand
, Gems and
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jewellery
plunged by 5. 18% worth $30
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billion
by 2016.

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that, Agriculture
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products
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showed
a slight
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positive
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change
by 0. 81% in the
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year
2016.
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for textiles the earning increased by more than 15. 24% in 2016 which is five times greater than the percentage of the
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sector. The textiles sector earned $25
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billion
in 2015 and $31
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in the
next
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year
2016.

In conclusion
, we can
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that the country has
overall
succeeded in the
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2016 by approximately 22%.
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Gems and jewel
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showed
a decline
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the country managed to gain about 22%.

IELTS academic The following diagram derives from a bar chart which illustrates the country’s earnings from the export sector by the year 2015-2016.

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