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the following charts show the favorite colours for cars among men and women, and the proportion of actual car sales, in 2011.

the following charts show the favorite colours for cars among men and women, and the proportion of actual car sales, in 2011. E7o3r
The given pie chart illustrates the information for the most popular automobile colors among men and women, and the percentage of real car sales, in the year 2011. Overall, it can be seen that men prefer black vehicles, while women prefer silver automobiles. By contrast, the white cars in males accounted for the least. Men are fascinated about the black vehicle the most, with around 80% preferring it. Women, on the other hand, prefer black automobiles, with only 10% being the lowest in the table. The numbers for women are 70% lower than for males. Silver and bright colors are the second most popular among males, accounting for 10% of the total. White automobiles are preferred by 10% of women, with bright colors their second favorite color at 25%. Men choose white at a rate of 5%, which is the lowest. The data of this white car is that women are twice as many as men.
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colors among
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, and the percentage of real car sales, in the year 2011.

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men
prefer black vehicles, while
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prefer silver
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. By contrast, the
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cars in males accounted for the least.

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10% being the lowest in the table. The numbers for
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are 70% lower than for males.

Silver and bright colors are the second most popular among males, accounting for 10% of the total.
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White
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women
, with bright colors their second favorite
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at 25%.
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at a rate of 5%, which is the lowest. The data of this
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car is that
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IELTS academic the following charts show the favorite colours for cars among men and women, and the proportion of actual car sales, in 2011.

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