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The following chart compares the change in temperatures for four cities in a given year. Report the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The following chart compares the change in temperatures for four cities in a given year. Report the main features and make comparisons where relevant. 7LkV2
The presented line chart illustrates the comparison of average temperature in London, Berlin, Tokyo and New-York in particular year. Overall, it can be clearly seen that, at the beginning of the year the temperatures varied in each city, with hottest megapolis Tokyo. London and Berlin depicted the least temperatures than other cities, moreover they showed same pattern over the period. Now turning to the details, in January, the average temperature was in Tokyo with around 8 degrees of Celsius, while for New York was 0C. Then, the temperature for both Tokyo and New York sharply increased to 20 degrees of Celsius in May. Moreover, Tokyo reached the highest temperature with around 25 Celsius, while in New York 23C was average temperature in August. In December, the temperatures in Tokyo and New York noticeably decreased to 10C and about 2C respectively. According to the chart, the temperature in Berlin was same as in New-York, while the temperature in London was hotter by 5C than Berlin at first month of the year. At the half of the year, the average temperature in Berlin accounted for around 18C whereas in London the weather was slightly colder with 15C. At the end of the year, temperature in London and Berlin diminished to 5C and near to 0C respectively.
The presented line chart illustrates the comparison of
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in London, Berlin, Tokyo and New-York
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year.

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that, at the beginning of the
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year
the
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temperatures
varied in each city, with
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megapolis
Tokyo. London and Berlin depicted the least
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temperatures
than other cities,
moreover
they
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same pattern over the period.

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Now
turning to the
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details
, in January, the
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was in Tokyo with around 8 degrees of Celsius, while for
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New
York was 0C. Then, the
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temperature
for both Tokyo and
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New
York
sharply
increased to 20 degrees of Celsius in May.
Moreover
, Tokyo reached the highest
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with around 25 Celsius, while in
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New
York 23C was
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temperature
in August. In December, the
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temperatures
in Tokyo and
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New
York
noticeably
decreased to 10C and about 2C
respectively
.

According to the chart, the
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in Berlin was same as in New-York, while the
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in London was hotter by 5C than Berlin at
first
month of the
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year
. At the half of the
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, the
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in Berlin accounted for around 18C whereas in London the weather was
slightly
colder with 15C. At the
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end
of the
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,
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in London and Berlin diminished to 5C and near to 0C
respectively
.

IELTS academic The following chart compares the change in temperatures for four cities in a given year. Report the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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