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The flow charts illustrate the layout of a school in 2004 with a proposed site design for the year 2024.

The flow charts illustrate the layout of a school in 2004 with a proposed site design for the year 2024. d9OBK
The flow charts illustrate the layout of a school in 2004 with a proposed site design for the year 2024. Overall, it is clear that the main change for 2024 involves the addition of a new school building. The school will then be able to accommodate a considerably larger number of students. In 2004, there were 600 pupils attending the school, and the two school buildings were separated by a path running from the main entrance to the sports field. In addition, in 2024, it is expected that there will be 1000 pupils, and a third building will have been constructed. Furthermore, the plan is to combine the two original buildings, creating a minor path that links the buildings only. As shown in the second picture, the third building and a second car park will be built on the site of the original sports field, and a new smaller sports field will be relocated to the opposite side of the third school building. A new road will also be erected from the main entrance to the second car park. Finally, no changes will be made to the main entrance and original car park.
The flow charts illustrate the layout of a
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in 2004 with a proposed site design for the year 2024.

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, it is
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clear
that the
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main
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change
for 2024 involves the addition of a new
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school
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building
. The
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school
will then be able to accommodate a
considerably
larger number of students.

In 2004, there were 600 pupils attending the
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school
, and the two
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school
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buildings
were separated
by a path running from the
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main
entrance to the sports field.
In addition
, in 2024, it is
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expected
that there will be 1000 pupils, and a third
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building
will have
been constructed
.
Furthermore
, the plan is to combine the two original
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buildings
, creating a minor path that links the
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buildings
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only
.

As shown in the second picture, the third
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building
and a second car park will
be built
on the site of the original sports field, and a new smaller sports field will
be relocated
to the opposite side of the third
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school
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building
. A new road will
also
be erected
from the
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main
entrance to the second car park.
Finally
, no
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changes
will
be made
to the
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main
entrance and original car park.
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IELTS academic The flow charts illustrate the layout of a school in 2004 with a proposed site design for the year 2024.

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4 paragraphs
193 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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