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The first two charts compare how much of consumption and production took place in different parts of the world and the third one describes how profit was distributed among four sectors.

The first two charts compare how much of consumption and production took place in different parts of the world and the third one describes how profit was distributed among four sectors. nX9qE
The first two charts compare how much of consumption and production took place in different parts of the world and the third one describes how profit was distributed among four sectors. Overall, while most of the production was done in South Africa, Europe was the place that accounted for relatively greater consumption than other places mentioned. More interestingly, delivery sector took home more profit in comparison with all the other sectors combined. Regarding the consumption figures, consumption in America constituted 39%, which was little over three times as much as the figure for the rest of the world. In sharp contrast, Japan made up only 8% of the consumption chart, being about five times as little as consumption in Europe. As for production, it is clear that Japan and Vietnam accounted for similar percentages, at 18% and 16% respectively. The percentage of production in South Africa was double the amount in Indonesia, where it was 22%. Finally, transportation of goods was reported to have acquired the largest chunk of the total profit, with a hefty 51%, and it was 2% more than the remaining profit that got distributed among retailers, exporters, and producers.
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took place in
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was distributed
among four sectors.

Overall
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was done
in South Africa, Europe was the place that accounted for
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consumption
than other places mentioned. More
interestingly
, delivery sector took home more
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profit
in comparison
with all the other sectors combined.

Regarding the
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figures,
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consumption
in America constituted 39%, which was
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over three times as much as the figure for the rest of the world. In sharp contrast, Japan made up
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8% of the
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chart, being about five times as
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as
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in Europe.

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, it is
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that Japan and Vietnam accounted for similar percentages, at 18% and 16%
respectively
. The percentage of
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in South Africa was double the amount in Indonesia, where it was 22%.

Finally
, transportation of
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goods
was reported
to have acquired the largest chunk of the total
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profit
, with a hefty 51%, and it was 2% more than the remaining
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profit
that
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distributed among retailers, exporters, and producers.

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