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The first pie chart illustrates the energy usage in an Australian household and the second one demonstrates the greenhouse gas emissions as a result from this usage.

The first pie chart illustrates the energy usage in an Australian household and the second one demonstrates the greenhouse gas emissions as a result from this usage. 2xDVk
The first pie chart illustrates the energy usage in an Australian household and the second one demonstrates the greenhouse gas emissions as a result from this usage. In the first chart, households has used the most energy with heating which is 42%, this followed by water heating with 30% and other appliances with 15%. While refrigeration, lighting, cooling uses 7%, 4%, 2% of the total respectively, which makes 13% in sum. The second chart shows water heating has the biggest portion of the gas emissions with 32% while other appliances with 28% and heating with 15% follows that. Respectively, the gas emissions from refrigeration, lighting and cooling is 14%, 8%, 3%. These two charts clearly represents that heating's gas emissions percentage less than it's percentage of energy usage. Besides, water heating, other appliances, refrigeration, lighting and cooling households' percentage of gass emissions more than their energy usage percentage. While heating uses the most energy compare to the rest; this is not same on the greenhouse gas emissions.
The
first
pie
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chart
illustrates the
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energy
usage in an Australian household and the second one demonstrates the greenhouse
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gas
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emissions
as a result
from this usage.

In the
first
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chart
, households has
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used
the most
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energy
with
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heating
which is 42%, this followed by water
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heating
with 30% and other appliances with 15%. While refrigeration, lighting, cooling
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uses
7%, 4%, 2% of the total
respectively
, which
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makes
13% in sum.

The second
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chart
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shows
water
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heating
has the biggest portion of the
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gas
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emissions
with 32% while other appliances with 28% and
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heating
with 15% follows that.
Respectively
, the
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gas
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emissions
from refrigeration, lighting and cooling is 14%, 8%, 3%.

These two
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charts
clearly
represents that heating's
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gas
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emissions
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percentage
less than it's
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percentage
of
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energy
usage.
Besides
, water
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heating
, other appliances, refrigeration, lighting and cooling households'
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percentage
of
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gass
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emissions
more than their
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energy
usage
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percentage
. While
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heating
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uses
the most
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energy
compare to the rest; this is not same on the greenhouse
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gas
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emissions
.
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IELTS academic The first pie chart illustrates the energy usage in an Australian household and the second one demonstrates the greenhouse gas emissions as a result from this usage.

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6.5
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