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The first graph depicts what kind of occupation Anthropologists have after completed their bachelors from one college.

The first graph depicts what kind of occupation Anthropologists have after completed their bachelors from one college. le5b9
The first graph depicts what kind of occupation Anthropologists have after completed their bachelors from one college. The first graph consists of 8 categories that indicate the destinations of Anthropology alumni after finishing their majors. The second diagram demonstrates the income of Anthropology graduated students in work after five years of graduation from the same university. The second diagram has three options which show the salary of graduates based on three types of occupation. First of all, half of the population of anthropology graduates are working full time according to the first graph which is the highest. The number of anthropology graduates who have been studying full-time postgrad and are not known is equal to each other which is 8 percent. The Proportion of part-time working alumni is similar to unemployed alumni. The rate of part-time work is 15 percent. The percentage of the unemployed is 12 %. The proportion of graduated students who have been working part-time and studying a master's program at the same time is 5 percent which is the lowest number among all categories. In the second table, Anthropology alumni who have been working for the governmental sector earn more money than people who work for freelance consultants and private companies after five years. Fifty percent of anthropology graduates earn 100, 000 dollars who work for the governmental sector that is the highest possible figure among all types of employment. Forty percent of employees earning the same amount of money as freelance consultants. Thirty percent of workers make the same money in private companies. The percentage of the Alumni who make 25, 000-49, 000 dollars is 5 percent in the both category of freelance consultants and the government sector. The number of people who work for the private sector is quite similar to them which is 10 percent. The number of anthropology graduates in the category of Freelance consultants and governmental sector who earn 50, 000-74, 999 dollars is equal to each other which is 15 percent, and the rate of people who work for private companies and earn the same money as them a bit higher than other types of occupation which is 35%. 40% percent of students earn money between 75, 000 and 99, 9999 dollars in the category of freelance consultants which is the highest number for this category. thirty percent of people earn the same amount of money in the government sector and 25 percent of alumni make the same amount of money in private companies. In conclusion, the Majority of the anthropology graduates found a job after graduation from one university. In addition to this, most alumni earn 100, 000+ dollars no matter what type of employment they work in after five years.
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In the second table,
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is 5
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is quite similar to them which is 10
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is equal to each other which is 15
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