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The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 1000 people asking if they travelled abroad and why they travelled for the period 1994-1998. The second chart shows their destinations over the same period.

The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 1000 people asking if they travelled abroad and why they travelled for the period 1994-1998. The second chart shows their destinations over the same period. dW76
The first diagram gives information about in the issues a research which essay a cross-section of 1000 people questions if they travelled foreign and why thy travelled for the term 1994-1998. The second diagram gives places over the same terms. The first graph we looked at data for visits foreign by British residents by purpose of visited (1994-1998), the graph was the largest data for holiday to keep increasing condition since 1994-1998. The second and third went to visit Foreign people (who ) were business and visits to friends and relatives without more too distance, as well as, other reasons went to visit travelling people was the smallest. Otherwise, the second graph described for destination of visits foreign by British residents by main region (1994-1998) The second diagram went to be the highest places of western Europe, besides, people went to be the place of other areas as well as went to go the lowest of north America since 1998. Second data described was the same with the highest data sine 1997, other time people who went to visit abroad without more too increasing sine 1994-1997. Overall, the first graph analysis data to go foreign the mostly of holiday as well as business or visits to friends and relatives people basic agreement. The second diagram shows time more after to go abroad people who were more.
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first
diagram gives information about in the issues a research which essay a cross-section of 1000
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people
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questions
if they travelled
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foreign
and why thy travelled for the term 1994-1998. The second diagram gives places over the same terms.
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first
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graph
we looked at
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data
for
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visits
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foreign
by British residents by purpose of visited (1994-1998), the
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graph
was the largest
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data
for holiday to
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keep
increasing condition since 1994-1998.
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The
second and third
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went
to visit

Foreign
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people
(who
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)
were business and
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visits
to friends and relatives without more too distance,
as well
as, other reasons
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went
to
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visit
travelling
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people
was the smallest.

Otherwise
, the second
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graph
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described
for destination of
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visits
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foreign
by British residents by main region (1994-1998)

The second diagram
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went
to be the highest places of
Capitalize specific, well-defined geographical regions: "Western Europe"
western Europe
,
besides
,
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people
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went
to be the place of other areas
as well
as
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to go the lowest of
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north America
since 1998. Second
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data
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described
was the same with the highest
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sine 1997, other time
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people
who
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went
to
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visit
abroad without more too increasing sine 1994-1997.

Overall
, the
first
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graph
analysis
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data
to go
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foreign
the
mostly
of holiday
as well
as business or
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visits
to friends and relatives
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people
basic agreement. The second diagram
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shows
time more after to go abroad
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people
who were more.
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IELTS academic The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 1000 people asking if they travelled abroad and why they travelled for the period 1994-1998. The second chart shows their destinations over the same period.

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6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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