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The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day. Kpmw
The first bar graph depicts the information about the proportion of men and women who involved in various household chores; while other graph illustrates the data regarding how much time being devoted by them in each activity. Focusing on the first graph, it can be noted that although both the gender did cooking and cleaning the most as compared with other categories; more women done these two activities than men which accounted for 80% and 60% respectively. Similarly, in case of house repairing females reported more percentage than their counter-parts. Interestingly, in case of pet caring where equal number of males and females have been involved in it. However, in the second graph as per the former graph cleaning and cooking is the dominate household activities for both of them; also girls spend their more time in it than boys. Besides this, for pet caring and house repairing least number of time have been invested by both of them, which accounted less than 20 minutes in each gender. Overall, it can be inferred that more women perform housework than men. But, for both the gender cleaning as well as cooking is the most preferable.
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first
bar
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depicts the information about the proportion of
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men
and women who involved in various household chores; while other
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graph
illustrates the data regarding how much time
being devoted
by them in each activity.

Focusing on the
first
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graph
, it can
be noted
that although both the gender
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did cooking
and cleaning the most as compared with other categories; more women done these two activities than
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men
which accounted for 80% and 60%
respectively
.
Similarly
, in case of
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house
repairing females reported more percentage than their counter-parts.
Interestingly
, in case of pet caring where equal number of males and females have
been involved
in it.

However
, in the second
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as per the former
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cleaning and cooking is
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the dominate
household activities for both of them;
also
girls spend their more time in it than boys.
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this, for pet caring and
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house
repairing
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least
number of time have
been invested
by both of them, which accounted less than 20 minutes in each gender.

Overall
, it can
be inferred
that more women perform housework than
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men
.
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, for both the gender cleaning
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as well as
cooking is the most preferable.

IELTS academic The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day.

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