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The chart below shows the different levels of past school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.

The chart below shows the different levels of past school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. qrgP
The bar graph illustrates the various levels of post school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of males and females which was held in 1999. Overall, Men had the largest proportion of skilled vocational diploma than any other courses. Most of the males had done the skilled vocational qualification which is the largest and the lowest proportion of females on the same course. In comparison both the undergraduate diploma women and postgraduate men was of same proportion 70% in each but the undergraduate diploma males has different with the postgraduate diploma that is 35% and 30% respectively. Similarly, masters degree has done by the most proportion of males than by the female whereas bachelor's degree had the less proportion of gaps between the men and women in 1999. At last, more males had done skilled vocational diploma than any other courses but most of the females was more undergraduate diploma.
The bar graph illustrates the various levels of post school qualifications in Australia and the
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Most of the
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had done the skilled vocational qualification which is the largest and the lowest
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both the undergraduate
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women and postgraduate
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whereas bachelor's degree had the less
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At last, more
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the different levels of past school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.

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