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The given bar chart demonstrates the time spent by 10 to 15 - ỷear- olds on an average school day in the Uk, includes chatting on the Internet and playing on games consoles.

The given bar chart demonstrates the time spent by 10 to 15 - ỷear- olds on an average school day in the Uk, includes chatting on the Internet and playing on games consoles. WWdk
The given bar chart demonstrates the time spent by 10 to 15 - ỷear- olds on an average school day in the Uk, includes chatting on the Internet and playing on games consoles. Overall, it can be seen that girls spare themselves more time chatting online comparing to that of boys. However, it follows a fairly different pattern regarding playing on computer games. The amount of time boys play greatly outnumbers the girl’s actual time spending on games consoles. Trend shows that nearly 70% of girls aged between 10 to 15-year-olds favour engage in online conversations over playing pre-programmed virtual games on computers with roughly 50%. Over 30% of girls spend 1 to 3 hours chatting online, which well over doubles the figure of playing human-generated games console. Of the girls who do play games, a big majority of them spend less than an hour for this activity, whereas most of them who prefers to chat online spend more than an hour, and about 10% spend more than 3 hours chatting online. By contrast, we can clearly see that over 80% of boys aged between 10 to 15-year-olds have an obvious tendency to play computer games more than chat with people online. Roughly 72% spend 1 to 3 hours to play video games, which is nearly 3 times higher than the propotion of chatting on the Internet. Similarly, about 10% spend nearly 4 hours immersing in computer games. However, the time percentage of boys chatting on the internet and playing games in less than an hour are almost the same, stand at nearly 28% at least and 30% at most.
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Uk
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girls
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boys
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playing
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games
. The amount of
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time
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boys
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play
greatly
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actual
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spending on
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consoles.

Trend
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70% of
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girls
aged between 10 to 15-year-olds
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engage in
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online
conversations
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playing
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pre-programmed
virtual
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on computers with roughly 50%.
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girls
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spend
1 to 3
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hours
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chatting
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online
, which well
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doubles the figure of
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human-generated
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console. Of the
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girls
who do
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games
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less than an
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for this activity, whereas most of them who prefers to chat
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online
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more than an
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hour
, and about 10%
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spend
more than 3
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hours
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chatting
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play
computer
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games
more than chat with
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spend
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4
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immersing in computer
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games
.
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, the
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percentage of
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boys
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chatting
on the internet and
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playing
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games
in less than an
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are almost the same, stand at
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IELTS academic The given bar chart demonstrates the time spent by 10 to 15 - ỷear- olds on an average school day in the Uk, includes chatting on the Internet and playing on games consoles.

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6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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