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the first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

the first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. dmKK
Given are two figures concerning the power consumed in various sections and the emitted greenhouse gas related to these parts in a house in Australia. A glance at the information provided reveals that most energy is used for heating while the highest amount of environmentally-damaging gases are produced by the part of water heating. One particularly interesting fact highlighted by the figure is that by far the most energy-consuming section is heating with 42 per cent but its greenhouse gas emission is about one-third of its power use. Accounting for approximately 30 per cent, water heating, meanwhile, is the second in terms of power application and the major part of producing greenhouse gas. In stark contrast, however, other appliances with utilizing only 15 per cent of energy, surprisingly, cause harmful gases double of the above-mentioned amount, with 28 per cent, as the second important section in greenhouse emission figure. The noteworthy is the fact that refrigeration is allocated a mere 7 per cent of all the power consumed but its dangerous gases emission is twofold. Lighting and cooling, however, meanwhile, are the least in both categories.
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gas related to these parts in a
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gas emission is about one-third of its
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. Accounting for approximately 30 per cent, water heating, meanwhile, is the second in terms of
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application and the major part of producing
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gas. In stark contrast,
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15 per cent of energy,
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gases emission is twofold. Lighting and cooling,
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IELTS academic the first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

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6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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