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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in hydroelectric power station.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in hydroelectric power station. WW9e
The given diagram represents the hydroelectric power station process to make the electricity. Overall, it is noticeable that the procedure starts with water from the river flow into the dam and culmination with a transfer of energy to a national grid. Moreover, the entire action includes 6 steps. On the contrary, day and night process are opposite trend to each other. Focusing on a day shift, the action starts with the river flows in the high-level reservoir dam. Then, an intake gate opens during the day, which allows water to flow and generate electricity in the power station. The water makes a turbine to operate a generator. Consequently, the electricity transfer to the power line and goes to the national grid. Turning to a night process, reversible turbines pump water from a low-level reservoir into a high-level reservoir. The water pumping upward to the intake gate, which closed at night time. In addition, the trend of night and day are opposite from each other and repeat the same pattern each day.
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diagram represents the hydroelectric power station process to
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make
the electricity.

Overall
, it is noticeable that the procedure
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starts
with
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water
from the river flow into the dam and culmination with a transfer of energy to a national grid.
Moreover
, the entire action includes 6 steps.
On the contrary
, day and
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night
process are opposite trend to each other.

Focusing on a day shift, the action
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starts
with the river flows in the high-level reservoir dam. Then, an intake gate opens during the day, which
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allows
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water
to flow and generate electricity in the power station. The
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water
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makes
a turbine to operate a generator.
Consequently
, the electricity transfer to the power line and goes to the national grid.

Turning to a
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night
process, reversible turbines pump
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water
from a low-level reservoir into a high-level reservoir. The
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water
pumping upward to the intake gate, which closed at
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night time
.
In addition
, the trend of
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night
and day are
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opposite from each
other and repeat the same pattern each day.
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IELTS academic The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in hydroelectric power station.

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4 paragraphs
171 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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