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The line graph illustrates demographic data of 65 years-old people in three different countries that are USA, Sweden and Japan.

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The line graph illustrates demographic data of 65 years-old people in three different countries that are USA, Sweden and Japan. Overall, there is a period that starts from the 1940s to 2040s. The general perspective finds that the 65-year-old communities would be increased in all countries in the next twenty years. The data of the graph illustrate comparable fluctuations in populations. Broadly speaking, these countries' highest projection is in around 2040 according to the expected increases of the chart. The graph indicates while Japan's lowest population was in the 1960s, the USA had started to increase in this period, similarly with the path of Sweden. Sweden is declining steadily and then rising about approximately %5 in the next decade. Japan is increasingly skyrocketing more than both other countries in the meantime. The huge opposition was around in the 1980s, while Japan was declining steadily, both the USA and Sweden rose according to the graph.
The line
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illustrates demographic data of 65 years-
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people
in three
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countries that are USA, Sweden and Japan.
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, there is a period that
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starts
from the 1940s to 2040s.

The general perspective finds that the 65-year-
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old
communities would
be increased
in all countries in the
next
twenty years.

The data of the
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graph
illustrate comparable fluctuations in populations.
Broadly
speaking, these countries' highest projection is in around 2040 according to the
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expected
increases of the chart.

The
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graph
indicates while Japan's lowest population was in the 1960s, the USA had
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started
to increase in this period,
similarly
with the path of Sweden. Sweden is declining
steadily
and then rising about approximately %5 in the
next
decade. Japan is
increasingly
skyrocketing more than both other countries in the meantime. The huge opposition was around in the 1980s, while Japan was declining
steadily
, both the USA and Sweden rose according to the
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graph
.
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IELTS academic The line graph illustrates demographic data of 65 years-old people in three different countries that are USA, Sweden and Japan.

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