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These are three pie charts that illustrated the ratio of some additions in the foods which are eaten in the USA.

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These are three pie charts that illustrated the ratio of some additions in the foods which are eaten in the USA. Three components as sodium, fat, and sugar for each meal which are breakfast, lunch, dinner, and snacks, and added with different amounts. Overall, the additional supplements are sodium, saturated fat, and sugar. There are leading meals that have more additions than others, which are dinner and snacks. A specific analysis reveals that while sugar is mostly added to snacks, the less one is breakfast which also has a small amount of sodium and the saturated fats. The percentage of sugar steadily rose by %42 in snacks. It is consumed less in the breakfast which matched the %16. The saturated fat chart presented captures data describing that lunch is one of the most fat-added meals after dinner. Also sodium is consumed in middays by people who live in America.
These are three pie charts that illustrated the ratio of
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additions in the foods which
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fat
, and
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sugar
for each meal which are breakfast, lunch, dinner, and snacks, and
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added
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different
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Overall
, the additional supplements are sodium, saturated
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fat
, and
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sugar
. There are leading meals that have more additions than others, which are dinner and snacks.

A specific analysis reveals that while
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is
mostly
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added
to snacks, the less one is breakfast which
also
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small
amount of sodium and the saturated
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fats
. The percentage of
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sugar
steadily
rose by %42 in snacks. It
is consumed
less in the breakfast which matched the %16.

The saturated
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fat
chart presented captures data describing that lunch is one of the most
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fat
-
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added
meals after dinner.
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middays
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people
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IELTS academic These are three pie charts that illustrated the ratio of some additions in the foods which are eaten in the USA.

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  American English
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