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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram illustrates daily body exercise rate done by Australian male with respect to female of variety ages in 2010. Obviously, although, young males were more serious compared with female (52. 8% men, 47. 7 women, 15 to 24 years), on the contrary, elderly females (53%) are more conscious then elderly male(45%). However, the trend of persentage of physical movement of ladies deplete dramaticaly from initial ages ( 47. 7%, 42. 2%, 39. 5%), on the other hand, gent's percentages are approximately same ( 52. 8%, 48. 9%, 52. 5%) in all of the aged teams. Furthermore, Interestingly, at 65 and more then this age male and female rate of exercise were almost same( Male 46. 7%, Female 47. 1%). In addition, at this age limit female statistics is a little bit higher then men. In conclusion, though, from 15 to 64 aged men are cotinued constant rate, alternatively, there was fall of activity between 25 to 34 aged group.

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