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The first bar chart above gives information about the percentage of adults who are overweight or obese from 1965 to 2015, and the pie chart shows the weight range of the adult population in 2015.

The first bar chart above gives information about the percentage of adults who are overweight or obese from 1965 to 2015, and the pie chart shows the weight range of the adult population in 2015. bwK3
The first bar chart above gives information about the percentage of adults who are overweight or obese from 1965 to 2015, and the pie chart shows the weight range of the adult population in 2015. The data they provided helps us to realize the obesity situation nowadays. At first glance, we can see that the percentage of overweight adults was seemly remained stable from 1965 to 1985. And then, it had increased considerably since 1995 then reach the top in 2015 at nearly 80%. Meanwhile, with the pie chart, we can see that in 2015 the percentage of people that has healthy or underweight is seriously low. Contrary to that, the majority of the population in 2015 was obese or severely obese, just only both of them accounted for nearly 75% of the population. Overall, it can be seen that the number of overweight adults increased remarkably through the years and accounted for the majority of the population in 2015.
The
first
bar chart above gives information about the percentage of
adults
who are overweight or obese from 1965 to 2015, and the pie chart
shows
the weight range of the adult population in 2015. The data they provided
helps
us to realize the obesity situation nowadays.

At
first
glance, we can
see
that the percentage of overweight
adults
was
seemly
remained stable from 1965 to 1985. And then, it had increased
considerably
since 1995 then reach the top in 2015 at
nearly
80%.

Meanwhile, with the pie chart, we can
see
that in 2015 the percentage of
people
that has healthy or underweight is
seriously
low. Contrary to that, the majority of the population in 2015 was obese or
severely
obese,
just
only
both of them accounted for
nearly
75% of the population.

Overall
, it can be
seen
that the number of overweight
adults
increased
remarkably
through the years and accounted for the majority of the population in 2015.
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IELTS academic The first bar chart above gives information about the percentage of adults who are overweight or obese from 1965 to 2015, and the pie chart shows the weight range of the adult population in 2015.

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