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the figures below show the information about the television watching habits of children Australia.

the figures below show the information about the television watching habits of children Australia. DYj96
The given bar charts illustrate the statistical proportion about how many hours using telly per school day and the latest time permitted to watching television of Australian children. Apparently, in the first graph, it can be seen that the highest time percentage of both girls and boys spend to using TV is at 1-5 hours mark. Furthermore, in the second chart, 7. 30-9. 30pm is the curfew of watching TV for the children which makes up the top rate. As is observed, 1-5 hours account for the most elevated percentage of watching TV not only girls but also boys in Australia, between 50 and 60 per cent. Except for the peak and the unworthy percentage of children who do not use TV, the proportion of Australian girls who watch television are decrease from 20 per cent at less than an hour to nearly half of 10. Besides, the boys are opposite with the girls when the percentage increase from about 17% to upper 20% at lower an hour to 5-9 hours. However, in nine hours mark, it is down to approximately 8%. In chronological order of the second chart, for the kids who do not watch the telly, the percentage of this mark is not worth considering with just about five. From the period of 7. 30 to 9. 30 pm, however, it is the curfew time to watch telly with the ratio of the female is nearly 60% and the male is above 50%. Later, the percentage of using TV between half-past nine and eleven pm decline less than 40 per cent, additionally the proportion of boys is noticeably higher than the girls. Subsequently, the curfew at near midnight of both gender takes up just under 10 per cent.
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hours
using
telly
per school day and the latest time permitted to watching television of Australian children.

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first
graph, it can be
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that the highest time
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of both
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girls
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spend to using TV is at 1-5
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mark.
Furthermore
, in the second chart, 7. 30-9. 30pm is the curfew of watching TV for the children which
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makes
up the top rate.

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is observed
, 1-5
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account for the most elevated
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of watching TV not
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girls
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also
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in Australia, between 50 and 60 per cent.
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of children who do not
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TV, the proportion of Australian
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girls
who
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television are decrease from 20 per cent at less than an
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to
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are opposite with the
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increase from about 17% to upper 20% at lower an
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to 5-9
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, in nine
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mark, it is down to approximately 8%.

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about five. From the period of 7. 30 to 9. 30 pm,
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, it is the curfew time to
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telly
with the ratio of the female is
nearly
60% and the male is above 50%. Later, the
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of using TV between half-past nine and eleven pm decline less than 40 per cent,
additionally
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is
noticeably
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Subsequently
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under 10 per cent.
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