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The bar charts illustrate the kids’ watching television habits in Australia between boys and girls.

The bar charts illustrate the kids’ watching television habits in Australia between boys and girls. DYjp7
The bar charts illustrate the kids’ watching television habits in Australia between boys and girls. It is apparently observed that most children used TV from 1 to 5 hours on a school day and they stopped watching from 7: 30 to 9: 30 p. m. Noticeably, both girls and boys had the same number of hours spent watching TV. In detail, a minority of kids did not watch tv. 20 percent of girls used television less than 1 hour, followed by boys with 15 percent. Moreover, 1 to 5 hours is the most popular number of using TV in both girls and boys. In addition, 15 percent of girls spent 5 to 9 hours watching. In contrast, the quantity of boys took up 20 percent. Besides, there was a similarity in the number of boys and girls who used tv more than 9 hours. Additionally, the period from 7: 30 to 9: 30 p. m was the most appealing time to watch TV for Australia's kids. Although almost 60 percent of girls watched TV at this time, the quantity of boys made up 50 percent. The percentage of girls using TV from 9: 30 to 11 p. m was 35 in spite of 40 percent of boys. By contrast, 15 percent of girls and 17 percent of boys who watch Tv after 11 p. m. Strikingly, the disparity of boys and girls most of the time was 5 percent.
The bar charts illustrate the kids’ watching television habits in Australia between
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observed that most children
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TV from 1 to 5
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on a school
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watching from 7: 30 to 9: 30 p. m.
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, both
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had the same number of
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spent watching TV.

In detail, a minority of kids did not
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with 15
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is the most popular number of using TV in both
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spent 5 to 9
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took up 20
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more than 9 hours.

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TV for Australia's kids. Although almost 60
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TV at this time, the quantity of
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made up 50
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using TV from 9: 30 to 11 p. m was 35
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