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The Figure Illustrates why people choose work from home and the amount of hours they worked according to gender in the year 2019.

The Figure Illustrates why people choose work from home and the amount of hours they worked according to gender in the year 2019. mY3A
The Figure Illustrates why people choose work from home and the amount of hours they worked according to gender in the year 2019. Overall, it is clear that male's aged over 30 work the most number of hours. It is also observed that both male and female choose working from home as their preferred option in order to save their expenses. It is evident that the larger proportion of male and female preferred to choose working from home space as it is helped them to save their money. As far as Easier Child cared is concerned, females preferred has larger proportion when compared to male's. Furthermore, there is a slight increase between male and female in terms of More production. Moving towards the number of hours worked, it is apparent that highest amount of working hours was done by male aged over 30, while the least worked by males is 3%. On the other hand, females aged under 10 worked more when compared to women over 30. However, there is a gradual increase by women over men between the years 10 and 30 with just 6%.
The Figure Illustrates why
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people
choose work from home and the amount of
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they worked according to gender in the year 2019.

Overall
, it is
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clear
that male's aged
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over
30 work the most number of
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hours
. It is
also
observed that both male and
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female
choose working from home as their preferred option in order to save their expenses.

It is evident that the larger proportion of male and
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female
preferred to choose working from home space as it is
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helped
them to save their money. As far as Easier Child cared
is concerned
,
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females
preferred has larger proportion when compared to male's.
Furthermore
, there is a slight increase between male and
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female
in terms of More production.

Moving towards the number of
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hours
worked, it is apparent that highest amount of working
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hours
was done
by male aged
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over
30, while the least worked by
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males
is 3%.
On the other hand
,
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females
aged under 10 worked more when compared to women
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over
30.
However
, there is a gradual increase by women
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over
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men
between the years 10 and 30 with
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just
6%.
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IELTS academic The Figure Illustrates why people choose work from home and the amount of hours they worked according to gender in the year 2019.

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4 paragraphs
186 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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