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The charts below show how often people in three age groups did various different evening activities in 1980 and 2010.

The charts below show how often people in three age groups did various different evening activities in 1980 and 2010. NYlj
The bar charts demonstrates how people in three age categories spend their evening in 1980 and 2010. The information in the first bar chart show that visiting family and friends more popular evening activity than others. In 1980 retired people enjoyed spent time with their family and friends and liked eating out, more often than young people. People from 26-50 years do shopping and going to movies more frequently than others. It can be clearly seen that in 2010 people of different age groups liked to spend time online at home, more than do shopping and going to movies. It shows that online at home became popular activity in the evening. People in 26-50 ages didn’t like shopping while likes hanging out with friends and family. In addition, young people started going to movies more often than before.
The bar charts
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demonstrates
how
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people
in three age categories spend their evening in 1980 and 2010.

The information in the
first
bar chart
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show
that visiting family and friends more popular evening activity than others. In 1980 retired
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people
enjoyed spent time with their family and friends and liked eating out, more
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often
than young
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people
.
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People
from 26-50 years
The usual collocation for an activity ending in "-ing" is "go" not "do" or "play." Revise: "go shopping".
do shopping
and going to movies more
frequently
than others.

It can be
clearly
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seen
that in 2010
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people
of
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different
age groups liked to spend time online at home, more than
The usual collocation for an activity ending in "-ing" is "go" not "do" or "play." Revise: "go shopping".
do shopping
and going to movies. It
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shows
that online at home became popular activity in the evening.
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People
in 26-50 ages didn’t like shopping while likes hanging out with friends and family.
In addition
, young
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people
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started
going to movies more
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often
than
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before
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IELTS academic The charts below show how often people in three age groups did various different evening activities in 1980 and 2010.

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  American English
3 paragraphs
138 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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