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The charts below show how often people in three age groups did various different evening activities in 1980 and 2010.

The charts below show how often people in three age groups did various different evening activities in 1980 and 2010. NYlj

The bar charts demonstrates how people in three age categories spend their evening in 1980 and 2010. The information in the first bar chart show that visiting family and friends more popular evening activity than others. In 1980 retired people enjoyed spent time with their family and friends and liked eating out, more often than young people. People from 26-50 years do shopping and going to movies more frequently than others. It can be clearly seen that in 2010 people of different age groups liked to spend time online at home, more than do shopping and going to movies. It shows that online at home became popular activity in the evening. People in 26-50 ages didn’t like shopping while likes hanging out with friends and family. In addition, young people started going to movies more often than before.

The bar charts You should probably use "demonstrate".demonstrate
demonstrates
 how You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 in three age categories spend their evening in 1980 and 2010.

The information in the first
 bar chart This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstrateportrayindicatedisplay
show
 that visiting family and friends more popular evening activity than others. In 1980 retired You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 enjoyed spent time with their family and friends and liked eating out, more This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:frequently
often
 than young You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
. You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
People
 from 26-50 years The usual collocation for an activity ending in "-ing" is "go" not "do" or "play." Revise: "go shopping".go shopping
do shopping
 and going to movies more frequently
 than others.

It can be clearly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
seen
 that in 2010 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 of This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:various
different
 age groups liked to spend time online at home, more than The usual collocation for an activity ending in "-ing" is "go" not "do" or "play." Revise: "go shopping".go shopping
do shopping
 and going to movies. It This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstratesportraysindicatesdisplays
shows
 that online at home became popular activity in the evening. You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
People
 in 26-50 ages didn’t like shopping while likes hanging out with friends and family. In addition
, young You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiated
started
 going to movies more This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:frequently
often
 than This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
. 