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The employment of all male and female workers by occupation in the UK

The employment of all male and female workers by occupation in the UK Blbnp

This bar chart presents the percentage of employees in a variety of jobs regarding their sex. It should be noted that a great number of women (around 22%) landed a job in Administrative and secretarial parts. However, male counterparts mostly took part in Skilled trades(about 20%). Moreover, the lowest percentage of female jobs in 2005 in the UK, was skilled trades and Process, plant and machine operation group that is 2%. While the least percentage of men (around2%) are demonstrated to do personal services, about 14% of women worked in this area. Male workers were occupied in Manager and senior officials, Professional and Associate professional and technical for around 17%, 14%, and 13% respectively. Finally, women were less chosen except for the Associate professional and technical, Sales and customer service, Administrative and secretarial, and personal se

This bar chart presents the percentage of employees in a variety of jobs regarding their sex.

It should be noted
 that a great number of women (around 22%) landed a job in Administrative and secretarial parts. However
, male counterparts mostly
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took part
 in Skilled trades(about 20%).

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men
 (around2%) are demonstrated
 to do personal services, about 14% of women worked in this area.

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 in Manager and senior officials, Professional and Associate professional and technical for around 17%, 14%, and 13% respectively
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IELTS academic The employment of all male and female workers by occupation in the UK

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

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Lexical Resource: 6.5

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Grammatical Range: 6.5

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