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The bar chart illustrates the forecasted sales of private cars and company cars in the UK for twelve year period from 2003 to 2014. Analyse the graph given and present the contrast.

The bar chart illustrates the forecasted sales of private cars and company cars in the UK for twelve year period from 2003 to 2014. Analyse the graph given and present the contrast. lel0X
The bar chart illustrates the forecasted sales of private cars and company cars in the UK for twelve year period from 2003 to 2014. Further, the graph depicts the likely motorcycle scales in the same period. The demand of private cars is likely to follow a rising trend barring a dip in the year 2011 however the company cars will have stable numbers over the entire period. Motorcycle sale is also projected to follow the same pattern of private cars and their sale is going to have a gradual increase over the decade. People in UK will buy more and more private cars and the peak sales of around 3, 500, 000 will be achieved in 2010 which will be more than two times of that of 2003 levels. It is predicted that there may be a substantial reduction in private cars sales in 2011 but the 2010 peak will be surpassed in 2014. On the contrary, sales of company cars is going to be fairly stable over the entire period and remaining below 500, 000 mark. With regards to motorcycles, it can be seen that the demand of motorcycles will increase in a gradual manner from around 150, 000 in 2003 to nearly 400, 000 in 2014 while there may be slight rises and falls over the entire time period.
The bar chart illustrates the forecasted
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company
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in the UK for
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twelve year
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from 2003 to 2014.
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, the graph depicts the likely motorcycle scales in the same
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period
. The demand of
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private
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cars
is likely to follow a rising trend barring a dip in the year 2011
however
the
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company
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cars
will have stable numbers
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over
the entire
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period
. Motorcycle
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sale
is
also
projected to follow the same pattern of
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private
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cars
and their
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sale
is going to have a gradual increase
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over
the decade.

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People
in UK will
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buy
more and more
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private
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cars
and the peak
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sales
of around 3, 500, 000 will
be achieved
in 2010 which will be more than two times of that of 2003 levels. It
is predicted
that there may be a substantial reduction in
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private
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cars
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in 2011
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the 2010 peak will
be surpassed
in 2014.
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,
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of
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company
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cars
is going to be
fairly
stable
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over
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and remaining below 500, 000 mark.

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motorcycles, it can be
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seen
that the demand of motorcycles will increase
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in a gradual manner
from around 150, 000 in 2003 to
nearly
400, 000 in 2014 while there may be slight rises and falls
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the entire time
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IELTS academic The bar chart illustrates the forecasted sales of private cars and company cars in the UK for twelve year period from 2003 to 2014. Analyse the graph given and present the contrast.

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