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The double vertical bar graph compares two sets of data: the number of boys and girls using the internet at redwood secondary school from 1995 to 2002 . summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart depicts the number of students of both the sexes who utilised the internet facilities provided at Redwood Secondary School between 1995 and 2002. Overall, male and female groups showed a steady increase in their internet usage throughout the period. Both boys and girls experienced fluctuations in their rates. Although girls had a slight less rate of internet usage initially, they outnumbered the boys towards the end of the period. Only around 110 boys used internet in the year 1995. In the subsequent three years, they were marginally overtook by the group of girls. During the years 1999 to 2001, the male sex group is found to be increasing more or less slowly and steadily. In 2001 and 2002, the rate of internet use by males where around 310 and 318 respectively. Around 90 girls used internet in the year 1995 and continued to rise, outracing boys in 2000 (over 310). In 2002, the number of female students using internet reached to it's highest rate. The bar chart depicts the number of students of both the sexes who utilised the internet facilities provided at Redwood Secondary School between 1995 and 2002. Overall, male and female groups showed a steady increase in their internet usage throughout the period. Both boys and girls experienced fluctuations in their rates. Although girls had a slight less rate of internet usage initially, they outnumbered the boys towards the end of the period. Only around 110 boys used internet in the year 1995. In the subsequent three years, they were marginally overtook by the group of girls. During the years 1999 to 2001, the male sex group is found to be increasing more or less slowly and steadily. In 2001 and 2002, the rate of internet use by males where around 310 and 318 respectively. Around 90 girls used internet in the year 1995 and continued to rise, outracing boys in 2000 (over 310). In 2002, the number of female students using internet reached to it's highest rate.
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the internet facilities provided at Redwood Secondary School between 1995 and 2002.

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female
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groups
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showed
a steady increase in their internet
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usage
throughout the period. Both
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girls
experienced fluctuations in their
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girls
had a slight
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rate
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initially
, they outnumbered the
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boys
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boys
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internet in the
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year
1995. In the subsequent three years, they were
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. During the years 1999 to 2001, the male
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sex
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is found
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steadily
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rate
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males
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310 and 318
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.

Around 90
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girls
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used
internet in the
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year
1995 and continued to rise, outracing
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boys
in 2000 (over 310). In 2002, the
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number
of
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female
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students
using internet reached to it's highest
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rate
. The bar chart depicts the
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number
of
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students
of both the
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sexes
who
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utilised
the internet facilities provided at Redwood Secondary School between 1995 and 2002.

Overall
, male and
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female
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groups
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showed
a steady increase in their internet
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usage
throughout the period. Both
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boys
and
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girls
experienced fluctuations in their
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rates
. Although
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girls
had a slight
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less
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rate
of internet
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usage
initially
, they outnumbered the
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boys
towards the
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end
of the period.

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Only
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around
110
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boys
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used
internet in the
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year
1995. In the subsequent three years, they were
marginally
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overtook
by the
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group
of
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girls
. During the years 1999 to 2001, the male
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sex
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group
is found
to be increasing more or
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less
slowly
and
steadily
. In 2001 and 2002, the
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rate
of internet
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use
by
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males
where
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around
310 and 318
respectively
.

Around 90
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girls
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used
internet in the
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year
1995 and continued to rise, outracing
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boys
in 2000 (over 310). In 2002, the
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female
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students
using internet reached to it's highest
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rate
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IELTS academic The double vertical bar graph compares two sets of data: the number of boys and girls using the internet at redwood secondary school from 1995 to 2002.

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