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The maps show the changes of an island before and after tourism features.

The maps show the changes of an island before and after tourism features. nRkmE
The illustrations exhibit the transformation of an island after it is developed for tourist attraction. Overall, it is clear that there were many new accommodations in an island than previously. Additionally, those natural features such as trees still remain unchanged. On the island, one of the notable changes in an island is the appearance of reception house located in the center and on the north side of the island was a restaurant opened to serve tourists. Similarly, there were 6 new building which constructed in the west side of the island and surround by palm trees. On the eastern side of the island there were a cluster of 9 hotels and those features are connected by a footpath. Outside of the island there was a newly pier placed in the south which was easy for tourist accessing the reception and other amenities. Furthest to the west of the island the beach was remain relatively untouched and extended to a swimming zone. No changes were made to those palm trees in the island.
The illustrations exhibit the transformation of an
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island
after it
is developed
for tourist attraction.
Overall
, it is
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clear
that there were
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many
new accommodations in an
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island
than previously.
Additionally
, those natural features such as trees
still
remain unchanged.

On the
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island
, one of the notable
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changes
in an
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island
is the appearance of reception
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house
located in the center and on the north side of the
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island
was a restaurant opened to serve tourists.
Similarly
, there were 6 new building which constructed in the west side of the
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island
and surround by palm trees. On the eastern side of the
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island
there were a cluster of 9 hotels and those features
are connected
by a footpath.

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Outside of
the
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island
there was a
You used an adverb ('newly') instead of an adjective, or a noun ('pier') instead of another adjective.
newly pier
placed in the south which was easy for tourist accessing the reception and other amenities. Furthest to the west of the
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island
the beach was
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remain
relatively
untouched and extended to a swimming zone. No
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changes
were made
to those palm trees in the
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island
.
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IELTS academic The maps show the changes of an island before and after tourism features.

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