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the different kinds of degrees granted by the National University in three different years

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The three pie charts show the different kinds of degrees granted by the National University in three different years. The fields of study shown are Medicine, Law, Business, and Computer Science. The percentage of the total degrees granted for each field changes over the three years shown. In 1990, Business and Computer Science were the most popular fields of study. Thirty percent of the degrees granted were in Business, and another 30 percent were in Computer Science. Medicine accounted for 25 percent of the degrees, and Law accounted for only 15 percent.     The figures changed somewhat in 2000. Computer Science had gained pop- ularity, with 40 percent of the degrees granted in this field. Business had dropped to 20 percent, and Law had dropped to 10 percent. Medicine accounted for 30 percent of the degrees. In 2010, an even greater percentage of students had earned Computer Science degrees, with 45 percent of the total degrees in this field. Business and Medicine had both lost popularity, dropping to 15 percent and 25 percent of the total degrees granted, respectively. Law, on the other hand, had gone back up to 15 percent of the total degrees granted. The only field that consistently grew in popularity in the time period shown was Computer Science.
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