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the consumption of nutrients in the USA

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Firstly for sodium, it can be noted that a lot of it is consumed during dinner. The amount of sodium consumed for lunch might seem relatively less but is still quite high. A similar trend is seen in the saturated fat pie graph. The snacks consumed by the average American might seem relatively healthy in terms of sodium and saturated fats when compared to dinner but as seen in the latter graph, the American snacks are notorious for having an excess of sugar. The breakfast of the average person in the USA can be concluded as the healthiest meal in comparison to others and from the information provided. The dinner is the unhealthiest meal as a surplus amount of sodium and saturated fats. 2nd to the unhealthiest meal is the snacks as they have a lot of sugar.

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