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The difference’s precent between women and men

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This line graph depicts the reader of men and women from 2012 till 2014. It is clear from the graph there is some analogous between them except the last year. So according to what is shown we should to analyse the information to get the real result. The women in first years they are achieved more than men it’s arrive 7, 500 read, albeit women in that year have not their all right as she is now. Lastly women at 2016 they became less than before. So about men they are in first did not allocate their time to read as women did in 2011, but they are became analogous in 2015 such as confluence. However the line has risen in2016 and 2017, even though the reader’s men became more the women at 2017. Hence i though the women support their men to read, then the men taken her wives rule model. To sum up, we could say that the women in first years have hight percent in read, opposite men, they achieved highest percent last years.
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clear
from the graph there is
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analogous between them except the
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last year
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is shown
we should to
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analyse
the information to
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the real result. The
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first
years they
are achieved
more than
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it’s
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7, 500
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, albeit
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women
in that
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have not their all right as she is
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now
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at 2016 they became less than
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they are in
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did in 2011,
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the line has risen in2016 and 2017,
even though
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became more the
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at 2017.
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support their
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to
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, then the
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taken her wives
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model.

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IELTS academic The difference’s precent between women and men

Academic
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177 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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