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The diagrams shows how the layout of a school library has changed.

The diagrams shows how the layout of a school library has changed. qLOPD
The diagrams depicts that which alteration has been done after 5 years in the school library. Overall it is clear that due to the advancement in the technologies School faculity introduced recording studio, desk for laptop which were not available in the past. In the present situation, study tables has allocated to privately to each student, while these tables had been shared 5 years ago. Meanwhile, library office converted into conference room. Moreover, bookshelves were available on the North and South sides, now valuable on the front wall only. South side bookshelf has been replaced by desc which are specifically for students who uses laptops. Furthermore, meeting room borrowing and returning section remained at their place but recording studio has added in the new plan. However, desk for computers presently used for laptop users.
The diagrams
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depicts
that which alteration has
been done
after 5 years in the school library.

Overall
it is
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clear
that due to the advancement in the technologies School
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faculity
introduced recording studio, desk for laptop which were not available in the past.

In the present situation, study tables has allocated to
privately
to each student, while these tables had
been shared
5 years ago. Meanwhile, library office converted into conference room.
Moreover
, bookshelves were available on the North and South sides,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
valuable on the front wall
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
. South side bookshelf has
been replaced
by
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desc
which are
specifically
for students who
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uses
laptops.

Furthermore
, meeting room borrowing and returning section remained at their place
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but
recording studio has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
added
in the new plan.
However
, desk for computers
presently
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
for laptop users.
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