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Pie charts, population in Yemen and Italy in 2000 and 2050

Pie charts, population in Yemen and Italy in 2000 and 2050 GNDRx
These diagrams represent the percentages of people from three different age groups (0-14, 15-59, and 60+), living in Yemen and Italy in the year 2000 and an estimation of these proportions in the year 2050. Overall, it is estimated that by the year 2050, the older population, above 60 years of age, would increase in number in both countries. Conversely, the percentage of individuals below 15 years would decrease. In regard to Yemen, nearly half of the population were younger than 15 years in 2000. This figure would decrease significantly in the year 2050 to reach 37%. Whereas an increase is expected to 5. 7% and 57. 3% for the inhabitants over 60 and those aging 15-59 years respectively. On the other hand, in Italy, the largest percentage in the year 2000 was for individuals between 15-59 years of age, forming little under two-thirds of the whole population. This age group alongside the younger group is estimated to decrease over the next 50 years. The oldest population group, however, would more or less double from almost a quarter in 2000 to 42. 3% in the year 2050.
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(0-14, 15-59, and 60+), living in Yemen and Italy in the
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2000 and an estimation of these proportions in the
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to 5. 7% and 57. 3% for the inhabitants over 60 and those aging 15-59 years
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