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the diagrams show how the change of the town between 2003 and 2010

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The diagrams illustrate a number oTf changes which took places in the town during a seven year period starting in 2003. In the 2003s, a factory was located to the North-West and in close proximity to a Port which was constructed in the left-hand side of the town. A main road was erected in the left of a bridge which was built in the river in order to enable citizens commute to center town. In the next, the hotel was exactly in the middle of the town. The restaurant was directly opposite a bus stop and was a long distance away from the filling station which was located to the bottom right-hand corner. The church was half way between the filling station and a farm which was erected to the South-east. The most notable was the construction of a dual carriageway surrounding the town. The railway station was set up to the South. Based on the needed of railway station, a railway was set up run from the south to the bottom. A ware house was opened up near a port. While factory, hotel, filling station and restaurant did not change, a bus stop was relocated to near the church and was replaced by a car park. The farm was cleared make way for the golf course, and a new road which leads to the golf course was reopened. The pine tree was chopped to make away for the hospitalthe
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changes
which took places in the
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town
during a
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seven year
period starting in 2003.

In the 2003s, a factory
was located
to the North-West and in
Consider using "proximity".
close proximity
to a Port which
was constructed
in the
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left
-hand side of the
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town
. A main road
was erected
in the
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left
of a bridge which
was built
in the river in order to enable citizens commute to center
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town
. In the
next
, the hotel was exactly in the middle of the
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town
. The restaurant was
directly
opposite a bus
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stop
and was a long distance away from the filling
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station
which
was located
to the bottom right-hand corner. The church was
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half way
between the filling
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station
and a farm which
was erected
to the South-east.

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The
most notable was the construction of a dual carriageway surrounding the
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town
.
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The
railway
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station
was set
up to the South. Based on
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the needed of
railway
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station
, a railway
was set
up run from the south to the bottom. A ware
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house
was opened
up near a port. While factory, hotel, filling
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station
and restaurant did not
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change
, a bus
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stop
was relocated
to near the church and
was replaced
by a car park. The farm
was cleared
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make
way for the golf course, and a new road which leads to the golf course
was reopened
. The pine tree
was chopped
to
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make
away for the
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hospitalthe
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