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The diagrams show how the bee makes honey, and the stages in the production of honey. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The stages in the life-cycle of a honey bee and how honey is produced are illustrated in the diagrams. Overall, it is noticed that there are six main stages in the process of making honey, beginning with laying eggs in the honeycomb to leaving nectar in a hive in order to become a honey. After that, the production of honey involves five steps beginning with harvesting honeycomb from the hive by beekeepers and finishing with distributing and selling. At the first stage of a honey bee’s life-cycle, the queen bee lays their egg in the honeycomb The process continues with these eggs turning into larva over the course of three days. Subsequently, these larvae have completely attained maturity after a week. Once the larvae have turned into bees, it leaves the hive to gather nectar from flowers. At the following stage, the collected nectar is transported back to the hive and the bees leave again in search of nectar. At this point, a cycle has been completed and a new cycle will begin. The first stage of producing honey is collecting honey from the hive, after which they send this to the honeycomb factories for the honey extraction. The honey is being boiled for cleaning before being packed in each jar. The process concludes with these jars being distributed and marketed.
The
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stages
in the life-cycle of a honey bee and how honey
is produced
are illustrated
in the diagrams.

Overall
, it
is noticed
that there are six main
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
stages
in the process of making honey, beginning with laying eggs in the honeycomb to leaving
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nectar
in a hive in order to become a honey. After that, the production of honey involves five steps beginning with harvesting honeycomb from the hive by beekeepers and finishing with distributing and selling.

At the
first
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stage
of a honey bee’s life-cycle, the queen bee lays their egg in the honeycomb

The process continues with these eggs turning into larva over the course of three days.
Subsequently
, these larvae have completely attained maturity after a week. Once the larvae have turned into bees, it
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leaves
the hive to gather
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nectar
from flowers. At the following
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stage
, the collected
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nectar
is transported
back to the hive and the bees
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
again in search of
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nectar
. At this point, a cycle has
been completed
and a new cycle will
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begin
.

The
first
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stage
of producing honey is collecting honey from the hive, after which they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
this to the honeycomb factories for the honey extraction. The honey is
being boiled
for cleaning
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before
being packed
in each jar. The process concludes with these jars
being distributed
and marketed.
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IELTS academic The diagrams show how the bee makes honey, and the stages in the production of honey.

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6.5
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