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The diagrams show how the bee makes honey and the stages in the production of honey. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features and making comparisons where relevant.

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The given process illustrates the was in which the bee makes honey and the steps involved in the process of honey manufacturingAs can be seen from the diagram, the first step is that queen bee lays their egg in honeycomb and then larvae hatch in the following three days. After being fully grown for a week, the larvae are then mature enough to leave their hive in three weeks later. Following this, bees collect nectar from a wide range of flowers and then, they are leave it into their hive to make honey. Turning to the honey production, to begin with the honeycomb is put into the removal process to detach from hive by beekeeper. The following step is that in order to extract honey, honeycomb is brought to machine. Once the honey has been boiled to get rid of bacteria, they is then poured into jars. The last step is that honey is distributed and sold for customers
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process illustrates the was in which the bee
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makes
honey and the
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steps
involved in the process of honey
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manufacturingAs
can be
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seen
from the diagram, the
first
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step
is that queen bee lays their egg in honeycomb and then larvae hatch in the following three days. After being
fully
grown for a week, the larvae are then mature
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enough
to
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leave
their hive in three weeks later. Following this, bees collect nectar from a wide range of flowers and then, they are
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leave
it into their hive to
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make
honey. Turning to the honey production, to
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begin
with the honeycomb
is put
into the removal process to detach from hive by beekeeper. The following
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step
is that in order to extract honey, honeycomb
is brought
to machine. Once the honey has
been boiled
to
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get
rid of bacteria, they
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is
then poured into jars. The last
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step
is that honey
is distributed
and sold for
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customers
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IELTS academic The diagrams show how the bee makes honey and the stages in the production of honey.

Academic
  American English
1 paragraphs
158 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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