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The diagrams represent a development of the town of Langley from 1910 to 1950 which has removed and constructed buildings.

The diagrams represent a development of the town of Langley from 1910 to 1950 which has removed and constructed buildings. KWALM
The diagrams represent a development of the town of Langley from 1910 to 1950 which has removed and constructed buildings. By 1910, the townhouses were built on two opposite sides of Jordan street. Press on two sides of Sherman street was a store, laundry, cafe, and gray townhouse, while the area behind the store and laundry was used as wasteland. On the left side of the wasteland was a factory. The opposite side of the store and laundry was a cafe while behind the cafe was used as railway worker’s cottages and the left side of it was wasteland, while the bottom of the diagram was Railway line. The next 40 years, Jordan street and Sherman street were still the same but they are connected. The new lane was constructed and connected to Sherman street while the Railway line had been demolished. On the other hand, Townhouses on the left side of the diagram in 1910 were built as flats in 1950. The center of the diagram in 1950 was built as Sherman park with a little area for children. Across the new land, three stores were built. On the top of diagrams Sherman mansions had replaced the factory in 1910. The laundry and cafe are still there but change the area.
The diagrams represent a development of the town of Langley from 1910 to 1950 which has removed and constructed buildings.

By 1910, the townhouses
were built
on two opposite
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sides
of Jordan
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street
. Press on two
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sides
of Sherman
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street
was a
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store
,
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laundry
,
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cafe
, and gray townhouse, while the area behind the
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store
and
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laundry
was
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used
as wasteland. On the
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left
side of the wasteland was a factory. The opposite side of the
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store
and
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laundry
was a
'cafe' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "café"
cafe
while behind the
'cafe' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "café"
cafe
was
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used
as railway worker’s cottages and the
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left
side of it was wasteland, while the bottom of the diagram was Railway line.

The
next
40 years, Jordan
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street
and Sherman
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street
were
still
the same
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but
they
are connected
.
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The
new lane
was constructed
and connected to Sherman
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street
while the Railway line had
been demolished
.
On the other hand
, Townhouses on the
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left
side of the diagram in 1910
were built
as flats in 1950. The center of the diagram in 1950
was built
as Sherman park with a
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little
area for children. Across the new land, three
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stores
were built
. On the top of diagrams Sherman mansions had replaced the factory in 1910. The
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laundry
and
'cafe' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "café"
cafe
are
still
there
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but
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change
the area.
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IELTS academic The diagrams represent a development of the town of Langley from 1910 to 1950 which has removed and constructed buildings.

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