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The diagrams present information about the life cycle of salmon species.

The diagrams present information about the life cycle of salmon species. 86gpl
The diagrams present information about the life cycle of salmon species. Generally, there are three stages of salmon growth, started with an egg, hatched and to be a fry, became a smolt, and end the process as an adult in open sea. Following to diagrams, the process begins in the upper river with a slow movement. The eggs on the bellow of the reeds with a small stone, lay down for 3 to 6 months on this stage. After that, the egg was hatched and became a fry salmon with 3-8 centimetres long. It flew by a strong current to the lower river and stay there for approximately 4 years before transformed to a smolt with length 12-15 centimetres. Next, the smolt salmon continued flew into the open sea. Eventually, the smolt salmon lives in the open seas for approximately 5 years and they became an adult salmon. The adult salmon length was accounted by 70 to 76 centimetres long and ready to be catched.
The diagrams present information about the life cycle of salmon species.

Generally
, there are three stages of salmon growth,
started
with an egg, hatched and to be a fry, became a
smolt
, and
end
the process as an adult in open sea.

Following to diagrams, the process
begins
in the upper river with a slow movement. The eggs on the bellow of the reeds with a
small
stone, lay down for 3 to 6 months on this stage. After that, the egg
was hatched
and became a fry salmon with 3-8
centimetres
long. It flew by a strong
current
to the lower river and stay there for approximately 4 years
before
transformed to a
smolt
with length 12-15
centimetres
.
Next
, the
smolt
salmon continued flew into the open sea.

Eventually
, the
smolt
salmon
lives
in the open seas for approximately 5
years and
they became an adult salmon. The adult salmon length
was accounted
by 70 to 76
centimetres
long and ready to be
catched
.
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IELTS academic The diagrams present information about the life cycle of salmon species.

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