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The given line graph depict the information about the pencentum of people of different age group who attended a cinema in Great Britain from 1984 to 2003.

The given line graph depict the information about the pencentum of people of different age group who attended a cinema in Great Britain from 1984 to 2003. LLwnr
The given line graph depict the information about the pencentum of people of different age group who attended a cinema in Great Britain from 1984 to 2003. The data has calibrated in percentage. Overall, it can be seen that despite some fluctuations, over the period as whole the proportion of attended a cinema rose in all age group. Moving to detail, between 1984 and 2003, cinema attendance growth considerably across all age group. But the highest percentage was 15 _ 24 age group children from 1984 which climb to 18 percent and over the period growth about 50 %. However, 35 and over individuals priority to watched a cinema was a bottom out around 1. 5 percent and end of the period was increased that was nine percent. Probing to further, cinema attendance of 7 _ 14 and 25 _ 35 year old followed a similar pattern from 1984 to about 2002, which was shown some oscillation. Whilst, from 2002 the trends different 7 _ 14 year olds went to cinema less while cinema attendance of the 25 _ 35 year olds was on the incline.
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in Great Britain from 1984 to 2003. The data has calibrated in percentage.
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fluctuations, over the period as whole the proportion of attended a
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rose in all
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age
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. Moving to detail, between 1984 and 2003,
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attendance growth
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the highest percentage was 15 _ 24
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children from 1984 which climb to 18 percent and over the period growth about 50 %.
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priority to
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was a bottom out around 1. 5 percent and
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attendance of 7 _ 14 and 25 _ 35 year
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followed a similar pattern from 1984 to about 2002, which
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oscillation. Whilst, from 2002 the trends
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attendance of the 25 _
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IELTS academic The given line graph depict the information about the pencentum of people of different age group who attended a cinema in Great Britain from 1984 to 2003.

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