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The given chart demonstrates the figure of minutes of calls on telephone

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The given chart demonstrates the figure of minutes of calls on telephone of people living in the UK treated by three different methods over a 7-year-period starting from 1995. Looking at the graph, it is clear that the number of minutes of phone calls made via fixed lines witnessed an upward trend, while there was a slow reduction in that of mobile calls. It is also apparent that calls on mobile were the least popular type, in terms of overall usage during the period shown. In 1995, a total of user minutes via mobiles stood at approximately 4 billion minutes. This number experienced a sharp increase to nearly 45 billion at the end of the period. The surveyed period saw a roughly similar trend in that number of national and international calls, where it surged from just under 40 billion to a peak of more than 60 billion during the given period. Calls made via local – fixed lines registered a number of well over 70 billion minutes at the beginning of the period shown. This figure steadily jumped to 90 billion minutes before experiencing a gradual drop to its original number at the end of the time frame.
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people
living in the UK treated by three
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different
methods over a 7-year-period starting from 1995.

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clear
that the
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number
of minutes of phone
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calls
made via
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fixed
lines witnessed an upward trend, while there was a slow reduction in that of mobile
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calls
. It is
also
apparent that
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calls
on mobile were the least popular type, in terms of
overall
usage during the
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period
shown.

In 1995, a total of user minutes via mobiles stood at approximately 4
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billion
minutes. This
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number
experienced a sharp increase to
nearly
45
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billion
at the
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end
of the
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period
. The surveyed
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period
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saw
a roughly similar trend in that
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number
of national and international
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calls
, where it surged from
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just
under 40
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billion
to a peak of more than 60
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billion
during the
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period.

Calls made via local
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fixed
lines registered a
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number
of well over 70
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billion
minutes at the beginning of the
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period
shown. This figure
steadily
jumped to 90
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billion
minutes
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before
experiencing a gradual drop to its original
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end
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IELTS academic The given chart demonstrates the figure of minutes of calls on telephone

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6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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