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The graph shows temperature degrees in Paris, Dubai and Sydney from January to December

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The line graph illustrates temperature rates within a twelve month period in popular touristic destinations - Paris, Dubai and Sydney. Overall, the dates from the graph can be devided into two categories where the temperature starts with low degree and concludes the period with the same or approximate index, and the other area where the weather is hot in winter days and gets colder in summer times. In details, the weather conditions in Dubai figured approximately 20 degree Celcius in January and significantly escalated with a little fluctuation till August that totalled to 36 degree. Thereafter, in autumn months the citiy's temperature started falling again getting colder and colder, and coming to December reached swift collapse and showed above the former temperature. Furthermore, there is an only line belongs to Paris that constitutes 5 degree in January and finishes the year in December with this constant temperature. Meanwhile, the urban warms considerably from February to July with a tiny fluctuations, and stabilizing between July and August at 20 degrees plunges notably untill the mentioned temperature.
The line graph illustrates
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temperature
rates within a
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twelve month
period in popular touristic destinations
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Paris, Dubai and Sydney.

Overall
, the dates from the graph can be
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devided
into two categories where the
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temperature
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starts
with low
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degree
and concludes the period with the same or approximate index, and the other area where the weather is hot in winter days and
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gets
colder in summer times.

In
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details
, the weather conditions in Dubai figured approximately 20
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degree
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Celcius
in January and
significantly
escalated with a
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little
fluctuation till August that
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totalled
to 36
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degree
. Thereafter, in autumn months the
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citiy
's
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temperature
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started
falling again getting colder and colder, and coming to December reached swift collapse and
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showed
above the former temperature.

Furthermore
, there is an
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only
line belongs to Paris that constitutes 5
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degree
in January and finishes the year in December with this constant
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temperature
. Meanwhile, the urban warms
considerably
from February to July with a tiny
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fluctuations
, and stabilizing between July and August at 20
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degrees
plunges
notably
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untill
the mentioned
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temperature
.
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IELTS academic The graph shows temperature degrees in Paris, Dubai and Sydney from January to December

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