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the diagrams give information about the significant change in paradise island from 1985 to present.

the diagrams give information about the significant change in paradise island from 1985 to present. YB9W5
The diagrams show the main striking changes in paradise island between the year 1985 to the present time. Overall, the most different between the past and the present are in the middle of the island, because they have replaced the trees to the restaurant area. The first prominent changes are in the west of the island, within in1985 there were a pier, but its has been added to become much more modern. Another significant change is next to the pear, the earlier building which used as scientific research station has been demolished, then currently it has been replaced to the swimming pool and hotel complex. The biggest change is in the middle of an island, because it used to be a lot of trees there, but its have been removed and then the new open restaurant has been constructed, and also the BBQ area. Furthermore, the land around of the island used to be off, but it has been built to the cycle path which is new for the visitors.
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in paradise
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between the year 1985 to the present time.
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, the most
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different
between the past and the present are in the middle of the
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island
,
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because
they have replaced the trees to the restaurant area.

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first
prominent
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are in the west of the
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island
, within in1985 there were a pier,
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but
its has been
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added
to become much more modern. Another significant
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change
is
next
to the pear, the earlier building which
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used
as scientific research station has
been demolished
, then
currently
it has
been replaced
to the swimming pool and hotel complex.

The biggest
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change
is in the middle of an
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island
,
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because
it
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used
to be
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a lot of
trees there,
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but
its have
been removed
and then the new open restaurant has
been constructed
, and
also
the BBQ area.
Furthermore
, the land around of the
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island
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used
to be off,
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but
it has
been built
to the cycle path which is new for the visitors.
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