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The table below shows the proportion of salary consumed on food ,electronic devices ,music and videos by both adults and children divided in gender in the Uk in 1998.

The table below shows the proportion of salary consumed on food, electronic devices, music and videos by both adults and children divided in gender in the Uk in 1998. Wm7oq
The tabulate illustrates the percentage of income utilized on food, electronic equipment, music and videos by both adults and children, divided in gender in the Uk in 1998. Overall, it can be seen that children preferred to spend more income on all items. Whilst the smallest part of money utilized by adults on same kind of things in 1998. To begin with, nearly 36percent income utilized by adults on 4 things. However, children consumed approximately 84 percent of money that they had on food, electronic equipments, music and videos. Moreover, children gave more preference to music as compared to other things. Additionally, both men and women spent more their salary to buy food rather than other items as well as exhauted same amount of money on music (5percent). However, there was a large difference depicted in the proportion of male and female's choice to purchase electronic devices(9percent). In addition to it, both gender gave less preference to videos(2 percent and 0. 5percent). Furthermore, girls out layed more salary on food, music and videos(11percent, 40percent and 17percent respectively. ) And less preferred to technology devices than boys( 9percent, 38percent and 18percent respectively). Additionally, 18 percent of money was spent by boys on electronic gadgets.
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income utilized by adults on 4 things.
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consumed approximately 84
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