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The line graph describes the proportion of population in New Zealand between 1950 and 2050.

The line graph describes the proportion of population in New Zealand between 1950 and 2050. mWNBN
The line graph describes the percentage of New Zealander people in 1950 and the predictions in 2050. At the first glance, it is clear that the proportion of people falling into the 15 and 35 age group in New Zealand will experience a dramatic change during the surveyed period. In addition, while the percentage of people aged 15-34 and 35-64 is expected to experience an upward trend, the reverse pattern will be seen in two other age groups. In 1950, around a tenth percentage of senior citizens in New Zealand was recorded as the lowest figure, while the proportion of people at the age of 35 to 64 occupied almost a quarter. By contrast, the figure for people in the 15-34 and 0-14 age group accounted for 28% and 32% respectively. In 2050, while the proportion of those aged 65 and over will increase slightly by 10% to 20%, the percentage of citizens from 35 to 64 years old is anticipated to climb significantly to nearly 35%. At the same time, prediction reveals that New Zealander at 15-34 will decline dramatically to the bottom rate - about 10%. Meanwhile, that for people under 14 is expected to descend slowly by 3% to 32%.
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Zealander
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in 1950 and the predictions in 2050.

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that the proportion of
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falling into the 15 and 35
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group in
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Zealand will experience a dramatic
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change
during the surveyed period.
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, while the
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of
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people
aged 15-34 and 35-64 is
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expected
to experience an upward trend, the reverse pattern will be
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in two other
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age
groups.

In 1950, around a tenth
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of senior citizens in
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New
Zealand
was recorded
as the lowest figure, while the proportion of
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people
at the
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age
of 35 to 64 occupied almost a quarter.

By contrast, the figure for
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in the 15-34 and 0-14
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age
group accounted for 28% and 32%
respectively
.

In 2050, while the proportion of those aged 65 and over will increase
slightly
by 10% to 20%, the
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of citizens from 35 to 64 years
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is anticipated
to climb
significantly
to
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35%. At the same time, prediction reveals that
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at 15-34 will decline
dramatically
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about 10%. Meanwhile, that for
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under 14 is
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to descend
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