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The diagrams below show UK students' responses to the question of to what extent would they describe themselves as financially organised. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The two diagrams compare the level of organizing the finance of UK pupils. The pie chart demonstrates how well students control their finance in four levels: from not all organised to very organised. Analysing deeper about the very organised group, the table shows the proportion of different age groups. In general, it's noticeable that more than a half of UK students consider themselves as fairly organised. In addition, students tend to be superior of managing their finance at the older age. 55% of the pie chart belongs to fairly organised group. Meanwhile, just about 4% pupils never organised their finance, which makes it the smallest proportion. The rest of the pie is divided almost equally to the groups of not very organised and very organised, with approximately 20 percent and 21 percent respectively. When it comes to the sector of very-financially-organised students, it accounts for 35% of students who are older than 26. This figure decreases gradually when it comes to the younger group: 18 percent of age up to 22 and 26 percent of age 22-35 years stay in this sector.
The two diagrams compare the level of organizing the
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finance
of UK pupils. The pie chart demonstrates how well
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students
control their
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finance
in four levels: from not all
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organised
to
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very
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organised
.
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Analysing
deeper about the
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very
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organised
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group
, the table
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shows
the proportion of
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different
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age
groups.

In general
, it's noticeable that more than a half of UK
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students
consider themselves as
fairly
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organised
.
In addition
,
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students
tend to be superior of managing their
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finance
at the older
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age. 55%
of the pie chart belongs to
fairly
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organised
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group
. Meanwhile,
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just
about 4% pupils never
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organised
their
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finance
, which
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makes
it the smallest proportion. The rest of the pie
is divided
almost
equally
to the
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groups
of not
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very
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organised
and
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very
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organised
, with approximately 20
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percent
and 21
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percent
respectively
.

When it
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comes
to the sector of
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very
-
financially
-organised
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students
, it accounts for 35% of
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students
who are older than 26. This figure decreases
gradually
when it
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comes
to the younger
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group
: 18
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percent
of
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age
up to 22 and 26
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percent
of
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age
22-35 years stay in this sector.

IELTS academic The diagrams below show UK students' responses to the question of

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4 paragraphs
182 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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